I am a wanderer, baffled between the choice of two paths. I am a kite that has become detached from its string on a windy day, nowhere to go. I am an ant, flushed away from my group. I am confused.
This is my description. It is the truth. I have options. Too many options. I am befuddled.
I was bestowed with confusion before I even got to school. I was flustered with where my bus stop was. The new complex I was put before was a maze. As I grew, the riddles in my life amplified. The changes that occurred each year tortured me. 2006, 2007, 2008, 2009, 2010... Confusion, Confusion, Confusion....
Then came middle school. The distortion was threatening. I hung on, though. Through every new rule, through every new addition to my life, through every new confusion. I was a mess in the middle of commandment. The puzzlement was insanity.
Finally, in 7th grade, I got a hold of decree. I knew what choices to make. In 7th grade, the world made sense.
I now know that I have a choice of what I am. This one is clear to me now. I don't have to be the confused guy. I don't have to be clueless. I can be what I want. I know something I am clear of. Confusion is my past...
Your essay was fantastic!!!In some ways I am just like you, mostly everyone is in the beginning. You just have to find that one place you know you belong.What are some more things you got confused about?
ReplyDeleteThank You.
ReplyDeleteI kind of copied the sample but only in someways. I loved yours too.
Yours was AWESOME! It was confusing and so complex. my favorite parts are " The changes that occurred each year tortured me. 2006, 2007, 2008, 2009, 2010... Confusion, Confusion, Confusion...." and "Then came middle school. The distortion was threatening. I hung on, though. Through every new rule, through every new addition to my life, through every new confusion."
ReplyDeleteSorry if my comment is a bit long!
I like it long. It tells me more. I made long comments too.
ReplyDeleteDear Ishan,
ReplyDeleteHi it's Gabe!!!!! Like always, AMAZING!!!!! I loved all of it. Especially the first paragraph, amazing. I also like the vocab word, decree. Overall amazing. That is the only word I can say, amazing.\
Sincerely The Guy Who Was In All Of You Classes Last Year,
Gabe :)
Hey Ishan!! I love your blog. The pictures are simply great. I love them. I got to go add some pictures to my blog to.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the inspiration.
-Darell
Glad to help Darrel
DeleteHi Ishan!
ReplyDeleteVery nice job! I though you did very well overall. This essay was very well done. The word choice was captivating. You used many complex elements of writing. Also, utilizing the sample to formulate this piece was a stroke of genius! Excellent!
The word choice in your comment was "captivating". :)
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